Radio Trailer Script Idea

This is my idea for our Radio trailer, it will last around 30 seconds. Start: Female voice: "All I ever wanted was to be invisible, but sometimes things done't work out how you expect them to" Music begins to fade in Voice-over: "Red Lizard productions presents Shadow..." Voice 1: "Rubbbyyyyy!" Voice 2: "Oi! she's talking to you" Ruby: "Just leave me alone!!" Voice 2: "Dont ever speak to me like that again, you are nothing!" Music drops to minor, becoming slower Voice Over: "Coming soon to your local cinema, Shadow." Music fades out Whipser: All I ever wanted, was to be invisible